Annotated Bib Peer Review Alex Gerondale

Brody Jane, "Many Fronts in Fighting Obesity", New York Times, May 20, 2013.Web.Feb 11, 2014


Summary) The idea behind the story that was presented is that obesity isn't just a factor of eating too much sugar or high fructose corn syrup, but is mostly a result of bad habits, surrounding environment, transformation of food, and of course family income. There area a lot of examples of all of these things but one of the major ones is that food companies these days tend to transform their food to make it more addicting. One such case is with a bagel brand that used to only weigh 2 ounces at 160 calories, but to make them more filling the company now had them at 10 ounces and 800 calories. And of course all the great food that surrounds people is hard to ignore with mental will power alone thus we cave into our desires. Good, healthy, and low fat food like fruits and vegetables are a lot more expensive then bad foods because of shelf life, which in turn gives people more incentive to by bad food because it cheaper. The article gives numerous examples and statics about why people are getting more obese (such that more women are getting into the workforce so there are less home cooked meals) but the main idea of it is that getting obese had more to do with social issues rather then personal choice.

Access) The article was very credible having the New York times as a publisher and Michael Pollan as a source. Michael Pollan is an author for dietary books and is also a professor at University of California. The time the article was written so far is better updated then any of my other articles and has an explosive volume of good material. The article also was very objective, focusing in on well calculated stats and facts.

Reflection) Loved it, the article is like a treasure chest full of things I can use for arguments in future papers. The source was extremely creditable and it has made me think more about how obesity really starts in our society. It will definitely fill in details I need to support my claims on obesity and how it develops and how to prevent it. Glad I discovered this source.

Wenk L. Gary PHD, "Why is Obesity So Hard to Defeat?", Psychology Today, Jan 11, 2012. Web. Feb 7, 2014.


Summary) The article's main point is that obesity is a result of not just poor diet and exercise but also overwritten tendencies in the brain. According to
Professor Gary L. Wenk when we eat food the chemicals, fats, salts, and proteins flow through our entire system including the brain. When passing through
our noggins the food we process gives the brain an idea of what the individual likes and determines what is pleasurable food or not by using the dopamine. The
dopamine is the part of the brain that releases pleasure, thus if we start a lifestyle that consists of eating junk all the time the brain determines that as the appropriate
diet. And the more we continue that lifestyle the more and more the dopamine will release pleasurable feelings to the body until the body is addicted to that feeling like
one would be to drugs. This makes it hard for the individual to change his lifestyle to escape obesity.

Assess) The article seems pretty reliable for information even though its somewhat outdated being a year old. The ethos of the article comes from a Professor Gary L. Wenk who teaches Psychology & Neuroscience & Molecular Virology, Immunology and Medical Genetics at the Ohio State University and Medical Center, and he also is a leading authority on the consequences of chronic brain inflammation and animal models of Alzheimer's disease. The article is also published is Psychology Today a credible site. The writing is very objective and focus on the idea that obesity is more a result of brain function then personal choices.

Reflection) This article was very relevant to my topic that focuses on obesity and how to prevent, defeat, and know how it functions. It focus mostly on how obesity functions giving
very detailed info. On top of that it comes from a credible source making it perfect for me.

Personal Questions:

Do you think I'm using the CRAPP's test enough, and is my summary clear?

Required Questions:

◦Are the summaries detailed enough that you understand what the source is all about? Are there details that the writer included that are unnecessary to the summary? What questions are you left with after reading the summaries?

◦Did the reviewer evaluate the sources using the CRAAP test? Do you see criteria based judgements about each letter (currency, relevance,authority, accuracy, purpose)? What is missing?

◦Are the reflection sections complete enough that you understand how the writer responded to the sources? Could they include more information?

◦Based on these two entries, in what direction do you think the writer's research is going?

◦What questions are you left with after reading these entries?

◦What are these annotations' weaknesses?

◦What are these annotations' strengths?

Review by Mitch Vollhaber
I think that your summaries are clear, you could even cut back some on the summaries and add a bit to the proceeding paragraphs. You could use the CRAAP test a little more too. You could add something about the purpose of the first source and go into a little more detail when assessing the second source. I think that your first reflection is really good but the second one is just repeating what you stated in the assessment. Consider rewriting the second one similar to the way you wrote your first reflection. Based on these too entries, you must be making the claim that obesity is caused by more than just an unhealthy diet. I would say that the second reflection along with a few grammatical errors make up the weaknesses of these annotations. The strengths of these annotations are your summaries and your first reflection.

Review by Sean Streier
I really liked your summaries, they were very detailed and i understood the point of the article. Like Mitch said, you can almost cut back on the a little. You did use the CRAAP test but i feel you were missing a few aspects, however i do know it is hard to get it all into the paragraph. I feel the first reflection is very good but maybe consider tweaking the second one a little as Mitch said. Based on these two entries would say you are headed towards how unhealthy eating may not be the only reason for obesity. One question I would have is how are you going to incorporate the sources, by that i mean linking them together. A weakness would just be little grammatical errors, but those are easy fixes. A strong suit would be your thoroughness in your summaries it gives us a good feel of whats going on.

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