Annotated Bib Peer Review RT

Questions about my annotated bib:

# 1 Do my sources seem to be repetitive? (meaning do I have sources that vary and touch different things to do with my topic?)

# 2 Am I staying on topic and keeping the audience interested?

Two entries that I would like a second opinion on:

Goyanes, Cristina. "13 Banned Foods Still Allowed in the U.S." Shape 15 January 2013: n. pag. Print.

13 Banned Foods Still Allowed in the U.S. 1072

Published in Shape Magazine is an article of 13 banned foods that are banned elsewhere. FDA is supposed to protect us from companies that sell their product on the shelf. Recently FDA did propose two regulations, but nothing to do with foods that are banned elsewhere. Food borne illness causes approximately 3,000 deaths per year in the U.S. alone. Yet when it comes to the FDA regulations it doesn’t seem like they are too concerned with our best interest. If they were we would join the many other countries that banned the 13 (major) ingredients. The list that Shape magazine provides is the most harmful to human health. Also in this article Shape had interviewed Mira Calton who is a nutritionist and her husband Jayson Calton (Ph. D.) who wrote Rich Food, Poor Food. The two had spent six years that took them to 100 countries on seven continents to study a big list of 150 ingredients that the U.S. still has not banned. Their solution is to spread the word, and urge you to refuse to buy foods that include at least one ingredient found in this article. Many people are concerned about the cost of eating healthy and that’s why they included a related article that gives those people a solution to cheaper, better food. Not only does this article tell you the most harmful 13 ingredients it includes what it is, what its used in, why the U.S. allows it, and the harmful health hazards that go with it.

Eng, Monica. "U.S. Allows Chemicals in Food That Are Illegal Elsewhere." Chicago Tribune News. Chicago Tribune News, 21 Jan. 2013. Web.

U.S. allows chemicals in food that are illegal elsewhere

I found this article very interesting. It is about a 15 year old girl who started a petition to remove the harmful substance brominated vegetable oil (BVO) from her favorite drink, and won! Her petition alone received over 200,000 supporters. When the FDA was asked for a representative to talk about why we still allow BVO in the U.S. that would decline, and not provide any information. Chicago tribune found in past statements BVO is allowed for a number of purposes, the biggest being a lack of resources. Not only is there a lack of substitutes but there was a study that claimed BVO is safe in small enough doses. Since 1970 BVO makers had marked the product as temporary. Over 40 years has passed and it is still not a priority to come up with a better substitute. In a statement made by the FDA they claimed their “mission is first and foremost to protect public health by ensuring that foods are safe and properly labeled.” It is because of them the U.S. food supply is “the safest in the world.” Yet we still have harmful ingredients found in many foods. The concern is that the same food companies that have these harmful ingredients in them changed for other countries that banned the ingredients yet they won’t do it in the U.S. even if petitions are sent their way. So why is that? Why isn’t the U.S. on board? According to the tribune once FDA approves something it’s nearly impossible to reverse it.

Additional Questions:

  • Are the summaries detailed enough that you understand what the source is all about? Are there details that the writer included that are unnecessary to the summary? What questions are you left with after reading the summaries?
  • Did the reviewer evaluate the sources using the CRAAP test? Do you see criteria based judgements about each letter (currency, relevance,authority, accuracy, purpose)? What is missing?
  • Are the reflection sections complete enough that you understand how the writer responded to the sources? Could they include more information?
  • Based on these two entries, in what direction do you think the writer's research is going?
  • What questions are you left with after reading these entries?
  • What are these annotations weaknesses?
  • What are these annotations strengths?

Reviewed by Jessica Dulz

I think your summaries did a great job of explaining to the reader what the source was about! they were long enough to understand without being too short to confuse the reader or not provide necessary information. I can tell you used the CRAAP test while evaluating your sources and ensuring they were all reliable. I had trouble distinguishing your reflection paragraph from the summary and evaluation. Based on these sources I would guess that you are going to write about the use of banned food or substances that are still used today in making product that we consume. The weakness of you annotations would be the reflection paragraph since I could not find it, and the strength would be your summary! overall great job!

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