Arguing Cause K Wong

An eating disorder is not a choice, and it is a major psychological problem occurring in people of all ages. But, there are those who accept the fact that they either have or want an eating disorder for non-ideal, unhealthy appearance goals. Sometimes the individual themselves may not even notice the problem occurring. An eating disorder is not just something one can physically attempt to brush off, it is something that takes over a daily life. Numbers become everything and anything. Calorie, weight, appearance, exercise, and abuse of over the counter drugs are all used in an unhealthy way. Without treatment it can lead to physical problems and eventually death. An eating disorder is hard to diagnose and those who have it may continue to believe that it’s a minor issue. This becomes very problematic, alluding to the fact that it is difficult to say who has a eating disorder yet not diagnosed as one. There is a fine line that separates those with diagnoses and those who have symptoms but are not classified as having an eating disorder.

A possible trigger of this disorder would be the influence of social media and the demographic of fitness within a state. Some individuals go to lengths to achieve such unrealistic body goals. Dieting and exercising are trigger behaviors of an eating disorder. There are healthier options in doing both, but some individuals tend to believe that self-starving and over exercising will be a alluring end result of what they wanted to achieve.

  • Is it clear what I mean exactly? It is clear, but too short.
  • Where might the reader be confused? What could be misleading or muddled? There are no linkages, support on where the information of possible triggers are from.
  • How does the claim(s) in this paragraph relate to my main claim? It relates to what triggers a eating disorder, what people do in order to obtain their ideal body.
  • What support have I used to argue this claim? What links this support to my claim? (for these last two, you can underline the support and make bold the linkage if it is explicitly stated. If the linkage is unstated, write it out in this quote box.) NO PRESENCE OF SUPPORT

There are also websites that promote an eating disorder lifestyle, but not all websites are glorified. In"Pro-Anorexia Web Sites: The Thin Web Line" the question is "Are these websites fueling an epidemic?", such websites are created by people who already have anorexia or bulimia and any other eating disorders. They may be in recovery from an eating disorder or both of the disorders. But, majority of the time many of theses people are self-diagnosed. These websites have been trending and horrifying parents and doctors for several years now. Those who already have eating disorders look towards theses promoting websites because they feel judged and can't rely on those outside of the realm. Theses websites are said to be created for those who are looking for like-minded people, in a way they can express their opinion without being judged. (There's no linkage for underlined sentence.) Dr. Doug Bunnell believe that such websites are affecting those who are ill to stay ill. There were through surveys and tests on the study of anorexia sites. The results provided that it was clear that 40% of adolescents responding to the survey has visited pro-anorexia sites, but as many as 34% visited on pro-recovery sites and or neither sites. (No support for linkage) But, there are those who believe that it should become a lifestyle such influences misleads most viewers to glorifying the act as a lifestyle.

  • Is it clear what I mean exactly? No indication of what the topic may be (jumpy).
  • Where might the reader be confused? What could be misleading or muddled? The reader might not be able to understand the situation. (I wrote it in more of a emotional/statistical point.)
  • How does the claim(s) in this paragraph relate to my main claim? It provides the first issue of websites that glorifies eating disorders and the statistical stand point of where issues arise.
  • What support have I used to argue this claim? What links this support to my claim? (for these last two, you can underline the support and make bold the linkage if it is explicitly stated. If the linkage is unstated, write it out in this quote box.)

This insight on how not all pro-ana/pro-mia sites glorify it as a lifestyle in perfection. Rather, there are also more pro-recovery sites compared to the opposite. There are many delusions and misinterpretations which trigger many of the behaviors. But, such websites are fueling an epidemic. There are many people who are easily influenced no matter if the information was valid or not. Such ideals of being thin and those who don't want to recover further is the matter of concern. The treatment matter of such illness is rather difficult because as stated by Doug Bunnell, PhD it is more difficult for recovery if the patient does not wish to recover.

  • Is it clear what I mean exactly? Yes, the insight of a glorified eating disorder lifestyle.
  • Where might the reader be confused? What could be misleading or muddled? When there is a need for more support.
  • How does the claim(s) in this paragraph relate to my main claim? Eating disorders should not be a choice, it is not a lifestyle.
  • What support have I used to argue this claim? What links this support to my claim? (for these last two, you can underline the support and make bold the linkage if it is explicitly stated. If the linkage is unstated, write it out in this quote box.)

Sheila Lintott brings a perspective of a person with eating disorders. The most intense ways women are encouraged to enjoy beautifying experiences is in many attempts to control their bodies through excessive dieting. The contributions to the problem of eating disorders exceed such certain beauty ideal is where women want to experience the sublime. Self-starving is being portrayed as the character wakes up at 5 AM feeling dizzy due to no food intake. The psychological aspect of thinking for someone who has an eating disorder doesn't think of hunger first. Instead of a typical idea of having a delicious meal Sheila mentions that the idea of eating doesn't come to mind, more so it's the opposite. The feeling of being able to push through without eating, to push your body to its limits of hunger, to push through avoiding to eat all ends with the idea of being thin. The idea that one feels guilty of giving into food can cause the fear of weight gain. If one were to devour food the second plan is to purge. There are ways around eating and not eating, what plays a big role in the situation is the act of feeling guilty. It helps the reader understand what mental state of mind. Many of those who are choosing this lifestyle abuse drugs such as laxatives on a daily basis because it is another way out. Which can lead to consequences causing inflammation of the digestive tract from laxatives and esophagus from stomach acid.

  • Is it clear what I mean exactly? It is clearly giving a background view and mindset of an individual with an eating disorder.
  • Where might the reader be confused? What could be misleading or muddled? There was no indication of topic jump. (Introduce the topic/this topic is allowing the reader step into a different set of shoes.)
  • How does the claim(s) in this paragraph relate to my main claim? It is where the issues occur and why issues occur.
  • What support have I used to argue this claim? What links this support to my claim? (for these last two, you can underline the support and make bold the linkage if it is explicitly stated. If the linkage is unstated, write it out in this quote box.)

Women are encouraged to enjoy experiences such as hungry to get to their goal of being thin through excessive dieting. Tricks such as purging relieved some people of guilty thoughts of eating and other literary sources that relate to her argument or may go against it. This will lead to physical body damage and consequences.The mental state of mind of someone with an eating disorder may choose an eating disorder and see it as a goal to achieve and even a lifestyle. Sheila Lintott's portrays actions and mental decisions can be caused by wanting a glorifying end results. But, it shouldn't be seen as a lifestyle. There is not beauty beyond having an eating disorder.

  • Is it clear what I mean exactly? Not really, this paragraph seems to just conclude the paragraph before.
  • Where might the reader be confused? What could be misleading or muddled? (Is this paragraph needed?)
  • How does the claim(s) in this paragraph relate to my main claim? -
  • What support have I used to argue this claim? What links this support to my claim? (for these last two, you can underline the support and make bold the linkage if it is explicitly stated. If the linkage is unstated, write it out in this quote box.)

Susan Haworth-Hoeppner has once stated that those within the family environment of having perfection, control, and enmeshment are the norms. It the development of self and self-image. Such cultures do transmit messages about thinness and body shape. Family usually alludes and convey such judgement to other family members and so on. It leads theses individuals to no other option but look towards other options for help. Media portrays female bodies to be thin and ideal as cultural aspect in present time.

  • Is it clear what I mean exactly? No indication of topic jump/cause.
  • Where might the reader be confused? What could be misleading or muddled? Who is Susan Haworth? Too little sentences = not enough information.
  • How does the claim(s) in this paragraph relate to my main claim? The family side to eating disorders.
  • What support have I used to argue this claim? What links this support to my claim? (for these last two, you can underline the support and make bold the linkage if it is explicitly stated. If the linkage is unstated, write it out in this quote box.) -

Such influences from what the media portrays do influence women tend to begin disordered eating behaviors. Most women who fall under the categories of having self-control over choosing not to eat, such concepts and actions brings family to not be accepting and force provide food. Theses women begin to unacknowledged and judged where they further push their self-control of self-starvation. Sometimes such actions can also be easily hidden from family members where it isn't as noticeable as one would think. But, there are also those who consider that behavior cannot be directly accounted as cultural matters.
The role of culture and family is where disordered thinking and eating habit begins. Many families may come to find such actions as absurd and unacceptable, thus further leading the individual to seek a haven where no judgement are made and they continue to embrace the eating disorder they have.

  • Is it clear what I mean exactly? First sentence is too abrupt, it is clear that the issue of being judged may influence and drive actions to its extent, but the reader may not understand your thinking.
  • Where might the reader be confused? What could be misleading or muddled? Where is this information coming from, is it trustworthy,etc?
  • How does the claim(s) in this paragraph relate to my main claim? Another issue which is falling under influence.
  • What support have I used to argue this claim? What links this support to my claim? (for these last two, you can underline the support and make bold the linkage if it is explicitly stated. If the linkage is unstated, write it out in this quote box.) (Not presented)

Those who suffer from eating disorders are usually obsessed with food and their body weight. They tend to regulate how much they intake and how much they feel is still "too fat". Eating disorders affect more than several million people at any given time as the journal states. It is most common in women between the ages of 12 and 35. When it comes to eating disorders, there are three main types of, anorexia nervosa, bulimia nervosa, and binge eating disorder. Those who have anorexia nervosa and bulimia nervosa are perfectionists who have very low self-esteem, causing actions such as regulating lower than normal intake. Sometimes such fear of gaining weight and continue to feel overweight may lead to self-starvation which can take their lives.

  • Is it clear what I mean exactly? Yes
  • Where might the reader be confused? What could be misleading or muddled? Where is the information from?
  • How does the claim(s) in this paragraph relate to my main claim? How victims of eating disorders lives are being flipped around.
  • What support have I used to argue this claim? What links this support to my claim? (for these last two, you can underline the support and make bold the linkage if it is explicitly stated. If the linkage is unstated, write it out in this quote box.)

People who suffer eating disorders typically don't know or want to admit that it is a problem. The American Psychiatric Association states that anorexia nervosa are diagnosed in patients who weigh at least 15 percent less than normal healthy weight for their expected height. Typically people with anorexia nervosa don't maintain a normal weight and refuses to eat. The listed symptoms are provided in the link above. As for bulimia nervosa the patient usually don't have a specific weight. They can be underweight, normal, overweight, and obese. Those with bulimia eat frequently and possibly eat over thousands of calories but after the binge eating stops they begin to feel the fear of gaining weight. This is where they turn to purging and laxatives. Sufferers tend to hide their binges, they're behavior may go unnoticed even towards close ones. The listed symptoms are provided in the link above. Treatments are both emotional and physical health through psychotherapy and having provided guidance.

  • Is it clear what I mean exactly? Yes
  • Where might the reader be confused? What could be misleading or muddled? What are some listed symptoms?
  • How does the claim(s) in this paragraph relate to my main claim? The background and characteristics of eating disorders
  • What support have I used to argue this claim? What links this support to my claim? (for these last two, you can underline the support and make bold the linkage if it is explicitly stated. If the linkage is unstated, write it out in this quote box.)

There are a list of consequences with prolonged abuse of the disorders comes with life threatening issues. Those who may not know that they have an eating disorder are in a problematic dilemma. Such eating disorders are seen to have taken over their lives without anyone noticing or themselves even noticing. It was an abundance of insights behind what comes with prolonged abuse.

  • Is it clear what I mean exactly? No, (Conclusion???) It ended abruptly leaving the readers confused.
  • Where might the reader be confused? What could be misleading or muddled? This is short, what are life threatening issues, why is it a dilemma. Conclusion does not allow reader to continue to "care" for the cause.
  • How does the claim(s) in this paragraph relate to my main claim? Does relate but there are no presence of linkage/support.
  • What support have I used to argue this claim? What links this support to my claim? (for these last two, you can underline the support and make bold the linkage if it is explicitly stated. If the linkage is unstated, write it out in this quote box.)

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