Arguing Cause Peer Review Alex Gerondale

1) is there enough info

Sean: Right now i believe you can have more, but like you told me, you are not one hundred percent done yet. I feel if you add as much information to your next sections as you did this, that you will defiantly be set on info.

MatracaI think you need more as well. The underline portions rises up questions and I think you need to add more support to what you are saying. A small petite girl wont become obese right away It depends on her age and metabolism.

2) other then adding counter argument and establishing obesity as a problem how can i improve this.

Sean: First thing i believe you can do is maybe go more in depth on your causes. Possibily try and make things more convincing, right now you have information. Now just tell us why this information is proof that this is the cause.
Matraca Back up your information more.

Required Questions

Does the argument answer the basic question: Why did this happen? What questions are you left with after reading the argument?
Sean: Yes this answers in my opinion the basic question. After reading I do not really have any questions.
Matraca stated above about the underline portion.
Does the writer establish that the problem exists and that we should care about it? What is missing?
Sean: Yes in the intro you do a good job at addressing the issue and convincing us that this is a problem and we should care.
Matraca yes but you need more supporting detail.
What seem to be the main points of the argument?
Sean: The main points are that social factors are a cause of obesity as well as food companies.
Matraca I agree with Sean.
Does the writer genuinely address opposition? What additional opposing viewpoints could the writer address? Can you imagine other objections to the argument?
Sean: Right now he has not added the opposition, but he is working on it and will be working on that and adding to it.
MatracaAgree with Sean as well again.
What were your reactions to the text as you were reading it?
Sean: I felt it was very factual and that we need to no more about why these facts are the cause.
Matraca I was left with questions as stated above.
What is the argument's greatest weakness?
Sean: Right now just the counter argument, but once again that will be added.
Matraca Needs more supporting detail.
What is the argument's greatest strength?
Sean: I believe addressing the problem at the beginning was very strong. It really addressed the problem.
MatracaAgree with Sean again.

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