Arguing Cause Peer Review Belina

Is my information presented in an order that is easy to follow?

Kelly Wong: I believe the way you presented your arguing cause was easy to follow. Make sure you make clear of what is important (increasing from least to highest of importance.)
- I think the entire piece was easy to follow and was presented in a professional way. Nicole

Is it clear where I stand on this issue?
Kelly Wong: Yes! The first sentence basically foreshadowed where you stood in the situation.
- Very much so! Nicole

  • Does the argument answer the basic question: Why did this happen? What questions are you left with after reading the argument?

Kelly Wong: I learned that as we consumers continue to allude the fact that theses products may be "organic","healthy, etc. which allows the organic foods industry to evolve. But, is it really healthy? I don't have any questions left after reading the argument. I like the way you used statistics as a standing point/support.
- Your argument answers the basic question clearly. I'm not left with any questions. Nicole

  • Does the writer establish that the problem exists and that we should care about it?

Kelly Wong: Yes, because we are the consumers of alleged products.
- Yes, more than once it was expressed why we should care about the issue you're writing about. Nicole

  • Does the writer genuinely address opposition? What additional opposing viewpoints could the writer address? Can you imagine other objections to the argument?

Kelly Wong: Yes, the first sentence is brought upon a question leaving the reader curious and reading on. I think you can address some more issues regarding the organic industry itself (their side of the situation) vs. the conveniently grown food's industry. I see some objections to be that not ALL organic industries fall under the corruption of not actually being "really healthy".
- Yes, it was addressed nicely. I don't see any other opposing views that you could address. **Nicole

  • What is the argument's greatest weakness? What would you recommend they revise before the next draft is due?

Kelly Wong: I think the 3rd paragraph is somewhat bulky, you can either make it more concise or separate the idea into two paragraphs to make it flow.
- I agree with Kelly, the third paragraph is a bit much to read at one take. Nicole

  • What is the argument's greatest strength?

Kelly Wong: the first sentence, introduction, and the use of statistics caught my attention. It allowed me as a reader to assume and believe that your given sources are reliable and true even if the sources may be a bit dated.
- I also agree with Kelly that the first sentence is very appealing to the entire piece of writing. Nicole

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