Arguing Cause Peer Review By Carly Dietrich

1.Does my citing of my sources look okay?
2.Does my paper sound a little choppy or does it sound pretty fluent?

Autumn-1. The citing of your sources within your paper looks good! You credit the people where necessary. But I didn't see a works cited at the end just the in text citations.

Autumn-2. You did a good job of making your paper fluent, good transitions.

Does the argument answer the basic question: Why did this happen? What questions are you left with after reading the argument?
Does the writer establish that the problem exists and that we should care about it? What is missing?
What seem to be the main points of the argument?
Does the writer genuinely address opposition? What additional opposing viewpoints could the writer address? Can you imagine other objections to the argument?
What were your reactions to the text as you were reading it?
What is the argument's greatest weakness?
What is the argument's greatest strength?

Autumn-1. Yes it answers the basic question. You answer all the issues of why bottled water is bad and tap water is better.
Autumn-2. You do a good job of showing the problem exists with all the facts and numbers you add to the paper. You talk about how much energy it takes and what happens to the bottles after they're used, it's a good point and strong for your paper.
Autumn-3. You address opposition and show the other side well then you give your reasons for disagreeing, good job on this part!
Autumn-4. I was shocked at some of the facts you presented. Especially all the energy that is used up just to dispose of water bottles. You make good points and really get the readers attention.
Autumn-5. The weakness may be that you use energy as your only argument really. The only thing with your paper is if people don't care about the environment then they won't care to listen to your argument, but most people care I'd say somewhat at least so that makes it a strong argument!
Autumn-6. What strong about your paper is that you really show how the bottle water is harmful to the environment and how much energy it consumes.

1. The sources look correctly cited, there were some facts that I feel aren’t obviously known that maybe need to be cited? But maybe not!
2. I think it sounds pretty fluent, maybe add some transitions though to make it flow even better and will keep readers attention.
3. I think you did a great job on answering the question, it was very clear! I don’t have any questions left unanswered after reading this.
4. Yes, you do a very good job at establishing the problem and making the reader/ audience aware.
5. The major effects bottled water has on the environment, and the misconception of what’s better, tap vs. bottled.
6. Maybe add some to the oppositions or different viewpoints.
7. It was very clear and easy to understand what the argument is.
8. Some parts are very short, add more in some places, and elaborate more on things.
9. How clear and to the point it is

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