Arguing Cause Peer Review Courtney Haas

How does it look so far?
*The argument looks good so far. You make good points about your argument. -Adam Lorentz
*I see where you're trying to go with here but consider trying to liven up your sentences a little bit. Right now you have a lot of simple sentences; try to put in some compound, compound-complex, or complex sentences. —Michael Hanson

Does the argument answer the basic question: Why did this happen? What questions are you left with after reading the argument?
*Your argument only begins to answer the question of why this happens. I am curious of how this paper will turn out. -Adam Lorentz
*It starts to state the harm that can come with consuming gluten. Not really enough there to judge heavily. —Michael Hanson

Does the writer establish that the problem exists and that we should care about it? What is missing?
*You do establish that a problem exist and also you give a few reasons of why we should care about this. You are missing the rest of your paper. I feel that you could also expand more on your problem by using a few sources. -Adam Lorentz
*It establishes that the problem exists but not much more yet. —Michael Hanson

What seem to be the main points of the argument?
I feel like the main point of this argument is that we should eat more foods that are glutton free because they are causing more people to have glutton intolerance. -Adam Lorentz
*The main point seems to be the health risks of a gluten free diet. —Michael Hanson

Does the writer genuinely address opposition? What additional opposing viewpoints could the writer address? Can you imagine other objections to the argument?
You do address the opposition right away about glutton intolerance. -Adam Lorentz
*You mention gluten intolerance. —Michael Hanson

What were your reactions to the text as you were reading it?
I was surprised that not much research has been done on this topic. -Adam Lorentz
*It looked like you knew what you were talking about with health effects. —Michael Hanson

What is the argument's greatest weakness?
I feel that you could provide more information about your topic at the beginning and provide references in your body. -Adam Lorentz
*There's only 2 small paragraphs right now and the sentence structure could use a bit of revising. —Michael Hanson

What is the argument's greatest strength?
You give good details about why glutton is bad for you and you also give more than one reason that supports your argument. -Adam Lorentz
*You seem to know about your topic; I have no doubt that once you start working on this paper and get everything down that it will be a good read. —Michael Hanson

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