Arguing Cause Peer Review Olivia Knutson

My paper is still a work in progress but hopefully you can see where it is going. I haven't gotten to addressing the counter arguments yet.
My question is do I establish heart disease as a problem well enough?

Rachel Modrow-

  • Does the argument answer the basic question: Why did this happen? What questions are you left with after reading the argument?

Yes, answered the main question. Describes what heart disease is and how people get it. I know its not done so I'm sure you will do this but you can talk more into detail about how to get it but you have a really good start.

  • Does the writer establish that the problem exists and that we should care about it? What is missing?

Yes, I like all the facts that discuss how many deaths heart disease causes in America, its very shocking and shows that it is a problem.

  • What seem to be the main points of the argument?

Main points would be that heart disease is the leading cause of death and you can get it by having an unhealthy diet.

  • Does the writer genuinely address opposition? What additional opposing viewpoints could the writer address? Can you imagine other objections to the argument?

When the paper is finished it will have opposition. You could talk about how people with a healthy diet can get heart disease too (runs in family) something like that to counterargument.

  • What were your reactions to the text as you were reading it?

I was shocked at how many deaths there are daily.

  • What is the argument's greatest weakness?

Not finished yet… Everything in the paper is good so far

  • What is the argument's greatest strength?

All the facts and details

Ali Morrow
Does the argument answer the basic question: Why did this happen? What questions are you left with after reading the argument? Heart Disease happens because of an unhealthy diet.
Does the writer establish that the problem exists and that we should care about it? What is missing? I would go more in depth about the leading causes
What seem to be the main points of the argument? An unhealthy diet can cause heart problems.
Does the writer genuinely address opposition? What additional opposing viewpoints could the writer address? Can you imagine other objections to the argument? I would just talk about how other people may think that unhealthy diets may contribute but are not a cause.
What were your reactions to the text as you were reading it? I thought it was interesting and it was very informational.
What is the argument's greatest weakness? paper is just in the starting phases
What is the argument's greatest strength? its a great start, flows good and makes sense.

Heart Disease Caused by the Modern Diet

According to the Center for Disease Control heart disease is the leading cause of death in America. The Center for Disease Control reports and average of 600,000 fatalities due to heart disease every year. One in Four deaths are caused by heart disease. Heart disease surpasses every cause of death including cancer, respiratory disease, and stroke. Heart disease kills approximately 25,000 more people per year than all types of cancers combined. Not only is heart disease taking so many American yearly, 2,200 people die daily from heart disease. That is almost 92 people dying of heart disease every hour in America alone. Not only is heart disease taking precious lives but it is also costing the United States 108.9 billion dollars a year, according to the Center for Disease Control.
Mayo Clinic sums up the definition of heart disease as:

The term "heart disease" is often used interchangeably with "cardiovascular disease." Cardiovascular disease generally refers to conditions that involve narrowed or blocked blood vessels that can lead to a heart attack, chest pain (angina) or stroke. Other heart conditions, such as infections and conditions that affect your heart's muscle, valves or beating rhythm, also are considered forms of heart disease (Mayo Clinic Staff).

We know heart disease kills over half a million people a year, in America alone. We know the definition of heart disease. But do we know what causes it? Yes. To some extent heart disease is genetic and there is simply nothing that can be done about it. Smoking also increases risk of heart disease. However, the majority of heart disease is caused by an unhealthy diet that consists of too many refined sugars and too many carbohydrates. It has been shown in many recent studies that the decline of heart health has been linked to the unhealthy diet that is consumed by so many Americans today. According to a study conducted by Dr. Ramon Estruch, people who have heart disease can reduce their risk of heart attack or stroke by 30% by simply forgoing a modern diet and adhering to the Mediterranean diet (Kolata).
If an unhealthy diet greatly increases risk of heart disease what exactly constitutes an unhealthy diet for the heart? An unhealthy diet for the heart consists of large amounts of trans fats. Trans fats raise cholesterol which leads to poor heart health. Some trans fats occur naturally in many foods. However, when found in a natural state trans fats are in very trace amounts. The real source of trans fats is processed foods. Trans fats are developed through a food processing technique called partially hydrogenating.
An article by WebMD explains how the consumption of trans fats became so relevant. " Trans fats seemed like such a good thing once, enhancing the flavor, texture, and shelf life of many processed foods — from cookies to frozen pizza. Unfortunately, they come with a health risk. Trans fatty foods tantalize your taste buds, then travel through your digestive system to your arteries, where they turn to sludge (WebMD)". The expediency provided by trans fats, to the modern food industry, long shielded trans fats from the discovery of how unhealthy they can be for the heart.
According to the same WebMD article foods particularly high in trans fats are:

"Cookies, crackers, cakes, muffins, pie crusts, pizza dough, and breads such as hamburger buns
Some stick margarine and vegetable shortening
Pre-mixed cake mixes, pancake mixes, and chocolate drink mixes
Fried foods, including donuts, French fries, chicken nuggets, and hard taco shells
Snack foods, including chips, candy, and packaged or microwave popcorn
Frozen dinners (WebMD)".

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