Arguing Cause Peer Review Sean Streier

Not one hundred percent done yet but i am working on finding a few counter argument sources.

1. Do my two causes make sense? or should i try and be more convincing, maybe use more quotes or sources?

2. Does it seem at any point that i am trying to come up with a solution?

  • Does the argument answer the basic question: Why did this happen? What questions are you left with after reading the argument?
  • Does the writer establish that the problem exists and that we should care about it? What is missing?
  • What seem to be the main points of the argument?
  • Does the writer genuinely address opposition? What additional opposing viewpoints could the writer address? Can you imagine other objections to the argument?
  • What were your reactions to the text as you were reading it?
  • What is the argument's greatest weakness?
  • What is the argument's greatest strength?

Is my topic interesting?

-I think it is, you grab the reader attention pretty well in opening. All you need is more supporting detail.(Alex Gerondale)

Does the argument answer the basic question: Why did this happen? What questions are you left with after reading the argument?

-Yes the writer establishes problem but maybe they should consider other problems (Alex Gerondale)

Does the writer establish that the problem exists and that we should care about it? What is missing?

-Problem is noted the only thing that is missing is that it should be described as the worst problem (Alex Gerondale)

What seem to be the main points of the argument?

-That cheap prices and personal choices of junk food make people obese(Alex Gerondale)

Does the writer genuinely address opposition? What additional opposing viewpoints could the writer address? Can you imagine other objections to the argument?

-no you need to get other peoples points in. Perhaps social environment or lack of activity could be used. (Alex Gerondale)

What were your reactions to the text as you were reading it?

-You just need more detail so i can stay hooked (Alex Gerondale)

What is the argument's greatest weakness?

-no counter argument and lack of detail. (Alex Gerondale)

What is the argument's greatest strength?

-good catching intro at the start (Alex Gerondale)

1. Do my two causes make sense? or should i try and be more convincing, maybe use more quotes or sources?
You should defiantly put more quotes of professionals to make your argument seem more formal, and more reliable. You causes make sense, and I like that you put your own learning experience in your argument.
2. Does it seem at any point that i am trying to come up with a solution?
You never really state a solution of the problem, but just what is causing this problem.
I feel that your main argument is the availability of unhealthy foods that cause obesity. You need more facts to back up your causes. My reaction was interest and wishing I can read more about what you think about his epidemic. I'm doing the same topic, and I like how your point of view is slightly different than mine. Your greatest weakness is that you did not expand much on your causes, and do not have much information to back it up. Your greatest strength/weakness is your strong opinion you put in this argument, It makes it a little informal but also convinces me to be on your side of the argument. Also try to use different word choice, I feel you use repetitive words.
-Sarah-Anne B. Hoit

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