Peer Review Hillger
  • Is it easy to understand and readable?

Bethany- The content that you have is readable and easy to understand.
Livia - I think it's easy to understand but it seems like you jump from one thing to another and then jump back if that makes sense.

  • Does the argument answer the basic question: Why did this happen? What questions are you left with after reading the argument?

Bethany- I want to know more about why it is unfair to have certain teams playing in championship games. If they are the best teams, I do not think this is unfair, but perhaps you could change my mind.
Livia - I agree with Bethany. You state some very significant examples but it doesn't seem like you get to the actual cause of your proposed problem. You mention/imply it but it almost seems buried with all the examples you included.

  • Does the writer establish that the problem exists and that we should care about it?

Bethany- You slightly establish the problem, but you don't have much content yet so Im sure you will when you have more. I do not see why I should care about this topic, however.
Livia - Again, I agree with Bethany. You don't necessarily establish the problem clearly. The examples you included imply why we should care about it but make it more known and "out there".

  • Does the writer genuinely address opposition? What additional opposing viewpoints could the writer address? Can you imagine other objections to the argument?

Bethany- You do not address opposite points of view. Like I said before, I do not think it is unfair for the best teams to always be going to championship games. Athletes might argue that they should be getting paid for playing.
Livia - I didn't notice any opposing points-of-view. Like Bethany said, you can address how athletes may argue about being paid or how it might be if "under the table" situations didn't happen.

  • What is the argument's greatest weakness? What would you recommend they revise before the next draft is due?

Bethany- Right now you just do not have a lot of content, so I do not know enough about the topic to find a weakness.
Livia - I'm familiar with your topic so I can see the direction you're going but, again, it's not clearly stated. The world of college sports is tricky and many different (carrying in importance) problems can be argued. Focus on your main arguing point and build from there. You can also build so much more on the examples you provided.

  • What is the argument's greatest strength?

Bethany- The greatest strengths here are probably the examples.
Livia - I agree with Bethany, I love the example you included.

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