Peer Review Nw

Arguing Cause Peer Review

  • Do my sources fit with the other information in the paragraph?

Alex-I think your sources fit very well with the other information, they work rather well together.
Ariel - Your sources fit the other information in the paragraphs, I guess I do wonder about the large pieces that stand alone. I think you could possibly use smaller portions of the text and elaborate more on them.

  • Do I need to include more sources in my writing?

Alex-More sources are always better to strengthen your argument.
Ariel - You mention that one of the main causes of the problem of excessive waste, is the lack of knowledge of recycling, you should find/use more sources to back this up. What are other causes? those would be helpful to add in as well.

  • Does the argument answer the basic question: Why did this happen? What questions are you left with after reading the argument?

Alex-This does answer it, and I am left with no questions.
Ariel- In your paper you do address the problem clearly and you do give a possible cause, but you could go into more depth with it, and look into other causes. I noticed that you end with trying to solve the problem, but your solution has nothing to do with what you identify to be the main cause, (lack of education of the problem) people are not going to set up recycling trips and buy reusable s if they do not know that there is a problem. They will not make an effort to fix a problem they do not know exists.

  • Does the writer establish that the problem exists and that we should care about it?

Ariel - yes a problem is established, and I think its set up to where the reader should care.

  • Does the writer genuinely address opposition? What additional opposing viewpoints could the writer address? Can you imagine other objections to the

Alex-You talk about the fact that some people don't have the time to recycle but what about the people who just don't care.
Ariel - I think with this problem there are many side to take, one being that this is not a problem at all, or that the cause is humans being wasteful and not caring about the environment, rather than ignorance to the problem. Although your main point seems the most promising, there are others to look at that I'm sure you came across in your research.

  • What is the argument's greatest weakness? What would you recommend they revise before the next draft is due?

Alex-Your argument is very good, I did notice a few mistakes with spelling.
Ariel - I would look at your wording, at some points I was a little confused with what you are trying to say. I would shorten some of the longer quotes. since this is a causal essay, I would focus on the causes and leave out the solution part.

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