Peer Review Questions Nw

Writers: Do you have any questions for your reviewers? If so, post them here:

  • Is there adequate information without the sources being inserted?
  • No, You need to cite sources, you need at least 7, this will help your argument build credibility. (Ariel Tix)
  • Need to cite sources - LM

Reviewers:

First: Please answer the writer's questions.^^

Then: Consider outside sources. Do they help support the writer's claims? Do the sources of support take over any portions of the writing and overwhelm the writer's voice?

You do not have in-text citations that I could find, although you are using a statistic in one case, that should be cited. your voice is apparent, Which is good, you are coming at this from a college student's point of view, which is helpful as a reader. (Ariel Tix)

You need to add citations into your work. I think your point of view on this is good and can be relatable LM

Did the proposal anticipate and respond to all valid arguments (opposing viewpoints)? What additional counterarguments and/or concessions would be helpful?

You did respond to some opposing view points, but you should go more in depth with them, and cite sources as to why they will not work, how do you know they will not work? have they tried these solutions other places and they didn't work? or are you assuming they won't work? Those claims need evidence. (Ariel Tix)

I also think it would be better if you went more in depth when it comes to the opposing side of view LM

Is the organization of the writing easy to follow?

The organization is pretty good, I knew where you were going most of the time. (Ariel Tix)

Organization was good LM

What questions are raised in your mind after reading this proposal? Is anything missing?

You talk about the education of recycling, and your solution is that professors take part of a lecture to educate students on recycling , how is this a viable solution? It's hard for me to believe that a professor would be willing to give up valuable lecture time to talk about a subject they may not even fully understand, or want to talk about ( they may not see it as a problem) . Also I know that BSU offers and REQUIRES a sustainability course, so there is education, at BSU at least, I think you as a student here would benefit from taking about that course. Also there are several little posters around campus that tell you what you can and cannot put in specific recycling bins, have you seen these? There is even some cartoon ones that someone made, I have seen these specifically in Sattgast and in the lower union.(Ariel Tix)

I think you could put a little more thought into your solution LM

What were the most memorable pieces of text?

What is the writing's greatest weakness?

Not looking into what BSU does to recycle, We have great examples and BSU is one of the most "Green" Colleges.
I think you are right with education, that's the way to go, but please look at what BSU is doing, there are several ways BSU is trying to educate us on recycling, posters near the recycling, the sustainability course. (Ariel Tix)

BSU is an extremely "green" college and this would help your argument a lot by looking at what has been done here compared to what other schools have done LM

What is the essay's greatest strength?

You stick with your thesis, your whole paper is showing how recycling is an issue, and you offer education as a solution, you have the process down. (Ariel Tix)

You have a strong theses and some good points LM

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