Project Proposal LM
  • What societal problem or problems have you identified while researching your topic?

Societal problems that I have come to realize are that a good amount of people enjoy animals in captivity because it gives them the chance to see animals that they would not necessarily be able to see on any regular day. There is also the problem of how the animals are treated and why it is not being changed.

Lauren, I think your problem is: Animals kept in captivity for entertainment purposes are often not being treated humanely and do not have safe or appropriate habitats.

  • What are the causes of this problem? Was it intentional? Are there extenuating circumstances?

These problems are caused because people think more about the entertainment of the population than they think about the good of the animal. In this society, so much our entertainment is based around how much money you can make, with the smallest expenditures possible. So, yes this is completely intentional. Companies like Sea World have all the possibilities in the world to make a change with the amount of money that they bring in.

  • What can we do about it? Is there any action that can be taken to change this? What action has been already attempted to address this problem? Why wasn't it successful?

There are actions that can be taken, but it is going to take a large group of people.. almost millions, in order to stop this type of animal cruelty. There are organizations that are doing the best that they can to help animals after they are no longer wanted to be zoos and aquariums and protecting them from being captured but their efforts can only go so far.

After Conference

Thesis: Animals are being kept in captivity mainly for entertainment purposes and are treated poorly on a day to day basis because zoos/marinas are looking to bring in a larger profit on the animal's entertainment ability than spend money keeping the animal healthy and happy.

In what ways is this thesis and topic challenging (p.108)?

Originally my thesis was going to be along the lines of "animals in captivity need to be treated better" but there is a loop hole in that thesis. There are some cases where animals are in captivity to help the animal survive the threat of extinction. They are not treated poorly, they are given the closest thing to free life without being wiped off the face of earth. The only problem with this new thesis is how are guidelines set up to decided whether the animals are being treated properly or not. How do we distinguish whether the animals are truly happy and not falling under a state of psychosis?

How is this thesis and topic compelling (p.108)?

This thesis can be interesting because majority of our population will go to the zoo or aquariums and see these beautiful animals performing under a trainer's thumb and not think twice about how the animal is mentally and physically suffering.

In what ways is this thesis and topic debatable or controversial (p. 109)?

This topic can be debated because I think that people have different standards to what qualifies as if an animal is being treated properly or not.


Does it answer a challenging, compelling, and controversial question?
Yes-LB
Is it debatable?
Yes it can be, She needs to provide a lot of information proving that these animals are living in poor conditions. Because i find it hard to believe that all animals in captivity are actually treated this poorly.-LB
Does it get at the heart of the controversy?
Yes-LB
Does it avoid overused ideas or common wisdom?
Yes-LB
Is it appropriate for the argument's audience, purpose, and context?
Yes-LB
Does it meet the needs of the project plan?
Yes-LB
Does it contain specific and interesting language (avoiding the titanic mistakes of clich├ęd phrases or use of the word 'interesting')?
Could use a little more-LB

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