Proposal Essay Responses Ariel Tix

Explain how Edmondson responds to opposing points of view. Describe specific passages in which she counters those or concedes and refutes them.

In several cases Edmonson appears to concede a point but, actually ends up refuting them. For example the quote "Economically, allowing chain stores into a town would seem like a sound game plan. They offer jobs, cheaper products, and perhaps the security that comes along with national brand recognition. However, the money… does not stay in the community…" (Pg. 260) In the first part of the quote she seems to be conceding saying that yes, these big stores offer all these benefits, but then later continues to show that what the stores claim to offer is not really what it seems.

Identify her main claim and at least three supporting claims. For each of these claims, describe one piece of support she has that is linked to each claim.

"Big box stores" allow for the loss of culture in small towns.

Supporting claims
1. "Instead of joining the existing culture, big box stores work independently to duplicate their product line and game plan." (pg. 260) Her support is a quote from Stacy Mitchell who is part of "The New Rules Project" who says that the decisions above are made in board rooms where the values of the town are not taken into account.

2. "This assault on independence and self-reliance is perhaps the most destructive threat to our communities by these corporations." (pg.262) Her support is an other quote from Stacy Mitchell "Large corporations are required by law to maximize returns to shareholders, [while] locally owned businesses can be guided by other values besides the bottom line" (qtd. in "New" 25) Part of culture is the independence of a town's citizens. They are able to make local changes influencing the community, but when big box stores come in they no longer have that power, their interests are not taken into account.

3. "As well as helping the community as a whole, the downtown shops offer benefits to individual community members."( 262) The support is a little weak, but its that by working for local business you get to see more of the behind the scenes work while compared to most "big box" stores you would just be working at a cash register. Another piece of support may be the quote "…are merely focused on getting by and not on bettering themselves" this leads into a quote from another source. " Simon Benlow suggests that people that no longer see themselves as part of a society as a whole but instead are focused on their own selfish desires and instant gratification." (262-263) This would be harmful to culture, since culture is dependent on a sense of community, and shared interests and characteristics and desires.

Edmondson uses sources throughout her argument. Which ones are the most effective? Why?
The ones where she uses specific examples of towns were helpful. they show how the difference in community is affected by the "big box stores" it is also effective when she used an example from her own experience, it her some credibility and the reader wants to trust in her points. When she quoted other sources to support her claims it made the argument seem more valid too.

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