Proposal Essay Responses B E

1. Explain how Edmondson responds to opposing points of view. Describe specific passages in which she counters those or concedes and refutes them.

~Edmondson directly calls out opposing views and proves them wrong. One example is found on page 2, when she says "And it is shortsighted to say that the products are cheaper even if the price tag displays a smaller number. If the health of downtown is taken into account, the price is rather quite high." She brings up the topic without stepping around it and proves it wrong with sounds, concise information.

2. Identify her main claim and at least three supporting claims. For each of these claims, describe one piece of support she has that is linked to each claim.

~ Edmondson's main claim is that department stores ruin the culture of towns. She supports this by describing Scottville compared to Cadillac and how corporations have impacted Cadillac. She also states that independence and self reliance is lost when big businesses invade and that local businesses can not compete with corporations prices, which she supports with her conversation with the man who used to buy groceries from a local farmer (who also provided for himself with his harvest) until he could no longer compete with Meijer's prices on produce - leading to him selling his farm and going to work at a factory. One more claim Edmondson states is that social bonds between citizens deteriorates due to the lack of interaction when it is no longer needed to go downtown for shopping. This she illustrated with the "cloudy and dark" windows of shops in downtown Cadillac, while the area where Walmart had been constructed was always busting.

3. Edmondson uses sources throughout her argument. Which ones are the most effective? Why?

~ One of Edmondson's most powerful sources is when she converses with the man who used to buy all of his produce from a local farmer, until he had to sell his farm and go work for a factory when a Meijer's came to town and made prices too competitive. This experience she shares evokes emotion from the audience and makes the whole situation and main claim more relatable and personal. This is the same for another one of her most effecting sources, which is "Apology to Future Generations" by Simon Benlow. This source also draws emotion from the audience - but focuses on the younger audience who will not be able to be part of a community, according to Benlow.

Outline of Argument

Paragraphs 1-4

Opposing views:
Paragraphs 5-7

Paragraphs 8-11

Corporations can sometimes be good :
Paragraphs 12-13

Paragraphs 14-16

Paragraphs: 17-18

Paragraph 19

P1 Intro to author and story

P2 Description of Scottville

P3 Impact of small community on citizens

P4 Description of Cadillac and how big companies have changed the town

P5 Opposing view of variety available knocked-down

P6 Knock-down economic gain proposed by large corporations

P7 Knock-down cheaper prices provided by large corporations

P8 Support by sources and Maslow’s hierarchy of needs

P9 Lose bonds within communities

P10 Personable example

P11 Assault on independence argument

P12 Middle-ground, corporations aren’t always bad

P13 Middle-ground continued, discussing quality of goods

P14 Downtown shops offer more to workers than Walmart does

P15 Next generation consumerism

P16 Walmart hiring illegal immigrants

P17 Citizens starting to stand up to big corporations, seemingly; belonging

P18 TACCI - local currency in towns

P19 We need to do this; conclusion

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