Proposal Essay Responses Kramer
  • Explain how Edmondson responds to opposing points of view. Describe specific passages in which she counters those or concedes and refutes them.

Edmondson talks about how these big stores may seem like a good idea, but then refutes by saying it hurts the downtown areas. She talks about how these big companies "..offer jobs, cheaper products, and perhaps security…but the money grossed in the stores does not stay in the community, aside from the paychecks." She stays on topic and supports her claim with reliable information.

  • Identify her main claim and at least three supporting claims. For each of these claims, describe one piece of support she has that is linked to each claim.

Her main claim is that bigs stores, like WalMart, take away the culture of towns. Edmondson supports this claim by telling us about Cadillac, and how big box stores put downtown stores out of business, by promising jobs and price lowering competition. A supporting claim she stated, was with the big stores, "social bonds begin to deteriorate." Another supporting claim would be, that downtown stores would get forgotten because of the convenient and cheap stores will take a majority of the smaller store's business. The last claim Edmondson talks about is how there will be less and less of a variety of skills because WalMart employees only need to know how to run a cash register. Her support is, "These megastores will hire several hundred people, mostly adults, who are more focused on getting by and not on bettering themselves."

  • Edmondson uses sources throughout her argument. Which ones are the most effective? Why?

One of the most effective sources Edmondson uses is the gentleman who explained that less than 20 years ago, he could walk down the street and buy his eggs, milk and meat for wholesale price from local farmers. This one is important because it talks about a specific example and it comes from someone who knew what it was like before the big box companies came along. Another thing is that he said he retained the peace of mind of knowing where his food came from.

Outline:

Introduction
Describes people of Scottville and paints a picture of the town

Background
describes harmful effects of box stores
Cultrure should be preserved
Box stores are good for the community
Transition from culture to economics
counter argument anticipates the argument that products are cheaper

Support
Personal testimony
values social, along with economic growth
Uses Benlow to explain how Consumerism is harmful

Consideration of alternative arguments
products are cheaper
more job opportunities

Conclusion
suggest solution (p.262)
Provides examples of what could be done

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