Proposal Essay Responses LM
  • Explain how Edmondson responds to opposing points of view. Describe specific passages in which she counters those or concedes and refutes them.

Edmonson talks about how these box stores moving into the small town community will draw in more jobs for the residents there and you can buy more for your dollar. Big box stores are about buying as much as you can for the least amount of money. On the opposite side of the argument, Having the big box stores draws away from the downtown area and people are able to do all of there shopping at one location. Instead of going to the downtown area where one would be forced to go to multiple different stores in order to get the necessary items, a big box store provides all of the necessities in one stop. This causes the downtown stores to eventually be forced to shut their doors, and no longer be able to continue the family business.

  • Identify her main claim and at least three supporting claims. For each of these claims, describe one piece of support she has that is linked to each claim.

Main Claim: Big Box Stores are bad for small communities
Claim #1- "Instead of joining the existing culture, big box stores work independently to duplicate their product line and game plan."

She describes this as walmart having the ability to decide what to sell in the community where as small business have the option of promoting local talents, such as the Scottville clown band

Claim #2- The money that these companies make do not go back to the community

When these large chain stores make a great product you would expect them to give back and better the community, but instead these companies offer there employees no benefits and hardly give back to the community.

Claim #3- These large chain stores are threatening the downtown areas economically, artistically, and are also threatening the social community.

Because of these large chain stores, social bonds are deteriorating, as people no longer need to go to the downtown area. When people work at these big box stores, majority of the employees are making just enough to get by, and it has a huge impact are the individuals ability to achieve happiness. When people are barely able to make monthly rent and not eat proper meals, they do not have time to worry about being part of the community.

  • Edmondson uses sources throughout her argument. Which ones are the most effective? Why?

The most useful sources that Edmondson uses in her arguments are the people that were around before the large chain store invasion. On one account, a man can remember a time where he could buy all his food at a wholesale price from a farmer down the road. He knew the money was going back to the individual and supporting his family and it gave him a piece of mind knowing where his money was going. This little bit of information has a large emotional range. You get a sense of what the community was like before the invasion of the large chain stores that tore through the community.

I. Introduction
For the introduction, Edmondson talks mostly about the hometown that she grew up in and how her community changed when she moved into a new town.

II. Shows the negative effects of big box stores in small communities
Edmondson goes into detail how these big box stores are impacting communities economically and socially.

  • The people of the community no longer go to the downtown core because all the stores have been combined into one (Walmart)
  • Since no one goes downtown, families are no longer able to carry on their family business
  • The social aspect of the town diminishes because people no longer venture to the downtown core
  • The money that the big box stores bring in doesn't go back to the community, it goes back to the large corporations. Most of the employees do not even receive benefits

III. Cause
The invasion of big box stores in small communities, tearing the culture apart.

IV. Solution
There needs to be a middle ground between big box stores and locally run businesses. Towns need to have a well developed downtown area that can draw in a large amount of tourists, but also have those large box stores that can create more jobs in communities.

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