Proposal Essay Responses Megan L
  • Explain how Edmondson responds to opposing points of view. Describe specific passages in which she counters those or concedes and refutes them.

While it may seem that the Walmarts and Meijers or the world bring variety tot her host towns, thereby adding to the local culture, these giants truly have the opposite effect. Instead of joining the existing culture, big box stores work independently to duplicate their product line and game plan. They decide what books, music, and film get stocked as well as what fashions are peddled.

  • Identify her main claim and at least three supporting claims. For each of these claims, describe one piece of support she has that is linked to each claim.

He main claim throughout her whole essay is that the big box stores are moving into small towns and destroying the small businesses through the town. Three supporting claims are yeah they are cheaper but then all the money goes out of the town and doesn't say within. It puts locals out of business and them to sell what they have put their whole life into. They also offer jobs but they don't give the benefits you need as well.

  • Edmondson uses sources throughout her argument. Which ones are the most effective? Why?

"large corporations are required by law to maximize returns to shareholders, [while] locally owned businesses can be guided by other values besides the bottom line" This really shows the difference between what local businesses do for the down and what big box stores do for it. All the money that local stores make goes fightback into the towns economy. Whereas the money for the big box stores goes back to the headquarters and the town doesn't see any of it.

Outline

I. Intro (few first paragraphs)
The author talks about how the town she grew up in is community-based but explains how things have changed after she moved to a new town and notices the differences related to the community

II. Presents the negative impact of megastores on the community based on her move to a new town
Describes in detail how these megastores negatively effect the community in a cultural sense where people become much more dependent (in response to the counterargument that box stores are good for the community)
- Turns the community into a homogenous population
- Continues to describe the negative effects of box stores (in an economic sense) by stating that even though jobs are available, employees receive little to no benefits and the money doesn't stay in the community
- Anticipates the argument that prices are cheaper but argues that in a community sense, they're quite high
- Argues that a sense of independence is taken away as well as a deterioration of social bonds

III. Cause
Increase in number of box stores in communities

IV. Solution - Existence of "Middle-Ground"
Keep locally-owned businesses and hold community festivals/activities to maintain the culture aspect of the community (while also keeping the box stores)

Side Note: has counterargument but is mainly linked to establishing the problem; no opposing links to cause or solution (focused on one solution rather than incorporating all possible solutions)

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