Rhetorical Analysis Peer Review Livia

Writers

In regards to this writing assignment, what are you most worried about?
Making sure I include everything that's stated in the project plan
Ignore my lack of citing my sources, I'll do it later

Reviewers

First, help the writer with their stated concerns.
I think the only missing things that I could find were the linkages and maybe implications
I believe that you did very well in including everything but some missing things may include as said above linkages and implications. (If possible be clear about the connections.) (KW)
How well can you follow the writer's line of reasoning? Are there any places where you got a little lost, or things seemed less clear?

Your line of reasoning is fairly well done. I wasn't lost during your break down of paragraphs it was more helpful seeing broken down information. (KW)

Does the writer address the rhetorical situation sufficiently (purpose, audience, author, genre, and context)? If not, where do you think they need to add or clarify information? these were all addressed
Yes all are address (KW)

Does the writer identify the:

  • Catalyst: yes, identified in a round about way, it could be made more clear by saying that his experience with reading ( that is becoming harder for him)caused him to write this article. Yes it was identified (KW)
  • Main Claim (thesis) Made very clear Yes (KW)
  • Supports were identified in the third paragraph and some were analyzed but not connected to linkages I think you can use some more information regarding how the linkage is presented and possibly be very precise about what you are stating in each paragraph. (Be more clear because some readers may not be able to comprehend the way you have comprehended Nicholas Carr's work.) (KW)
  • Linkages I could not identify them No, seems to be missing (KW)
  • Implications: the word was used, but I am not sure if it was actually identified, as I am not sure I fully understand it myself. But I think that his implications were to cause people to think about how the internet is affecting them and elicit some change in behavior. As said above I'm hoping I wasn't wrong about identifying implications but if you can be more precise on what the implications may be and how Nicholas Carr presents it, it would be helpful to the reader. (KW)

Does the writer give evidence from the article to back up their analysis?Yes
Yes (KW)

Finally, write a few sentences describing your reactions to the text as you were reading it.
Draft was pretty well written, I think there were a few funny word choices, and at times you gave support for your analysis, but ended with a quote after only introducing it and not fully explaining it, like in paragraph five you say that a quote could be taken out of context, but you don't say how it could.

I think this first draft is very well written and the paragraphs are easy to read (very organized). One thing I would like to read more of is the support for analysis and introducing the implication because it seems rather hard to find. Length is great as well, if you can be more clear and precise about how you comprehended his work it would allow the reader to understand fully what stance you are coming from. (KW)

Ariel Tix ( I underlined all my comments)
Kelly Wong (KW)

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