Solution Peer Review Jake Marcus

Consider outside sources. Do they help support the writer's claims? Do the sources of support take over any portions of the writing and overwhelm the writer's voice? No. — EB

  • Nope, you could even add more outside sources if you wanted. MH

Did the proposal anticipate and respond to all valid arguments (opposing viewpoints)? What additional counterarguments and/or concessions would be helpful? More arguments and opposing viewpoints would be helpful. — EB

  • You do state a few concerns, but it would be nice to see you argue against those concerns more. MH

Is the organization of the writing easy to follow? It's decent, but a lot of parts could use some clarifying. — EB

  • It has a decent flow to it. MH

What questions are raised in your mind after reading this proposal? Is anything missing? — No real questions so far. — EB

  • Can we survive in this society with no GMOs?

What is the writing's greatest weakness? There are a lot of grammatical errors. — EB

  • Too many "I think…" and "I feel…" just make authoritative statements to your reader. MH

What is the essay's greatest strength? Lots of good information. — EB

Does it help you re-vision your proposal?
-Yes, this is helping because with this information i know what i can add to the paper to make it better and also what i can work on such as grammar and being a decisive talker.
If so, how? If not, why not?
-Same answer as the first question.
Did you incorporate any of these comments into your revision of your draft?
-Yes i changed almost all of the "I think…"'s and also the "I feel…"'s.

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