Solution Proposal Peer Review Alex T

Writers: Do you have any questions for your reviewers? If so, post them here:

Is there anything that is confusing, I tried to explain what anime and manga are, the terms are ones that I know but to someone who doesn't do they make sense?


First: Please answer the writer's questions.^^

  • Claire: I absolutely adore manga and anime so I already know what they are :) and I think you did a fine job of explaining what they are
  • Paris: I didn't know what anime and manga were but after reading this, I have a really good idea of what they are.

Then: Consider outside sources. Do they help support the writer's claims? Do the sources of support take over any portions of the writing and overwhelm the writer's voice?

  • Claire: Including the actual dollar amount in revenue lost definitely makes it stand out more as a problem. I believe you did an excellent job incorporating the support into your paper. It definitely helps prove your point.
  • Paris: Your sources flowed very well with your paper without the sources taking over.

Did the proposal anticipate and respond to all valid arguments (opposing viewpoints)? What additional counterarguments and/or concessions would be helpful?

  • Claire: I think you did a good job responding to the arguments. The good and bad side of this argument are pretty clear cut
  • Paris: You brought up opposing arguments that I hadn't even thought of, then refuted them. You did a good job with that.

Is the organization of the writing easy to follow?

  • Claire: Yes it is.
  • Paris: Very easy to follow.

What questions are raised in your mind after reading this proposal? Is anything missing?

  • Claire: I don't have any questions.
  • Paris: No questions.

What were the most memorable pieces of text?

  • Claire: The cost of piracy was really shocking. I mentioned up there ↑ that I love manga and anime and I find myself looking for it online only because I can't find it anywhere else T^T Also in your paper you mentioned the only place to really find any manga is in the Mall of America. Well Book World in bemidji here has some manga. A very small collection unfortunately but at least its something :) also if you ever go to Coon Rapids (about three hours from here) the store Half Price Books has an awesome collection. They don't have a whole lot but compared to Book World its significant. Also since its Half Price Books, you can find a manga for $7 :3
  • Paris: I don't know much about this topic but just from reading your paper I learned a lot. It seems to be a big problem. I thought the idea of having a code that can only be entered once was a good idea until you pointed out that it interferes with people who don't pirate. I thought that was a good counter argument.

What is the writing's greatest weakness?

  • Claire: There are a lot of opinions that aren't really backed up with any data
  • Paris: I'm not sure if I missed it or you haven't finished yet, but I was unclear of what your solution proposal was

What is the essay's greatest strength?

  • Claire: Very interesting topic and the writing is very clear
  • Paris: The essay was easy to follow and read
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