Solution Proposal Peer Review By Carly Dietrich

Consider outside sources. Do they help support the writer's claims? Do the sources of support take over any portions of the writing and overwhelm the writer's voice?
Kayla: Your voice is heard well throughout the paper I thought and your information backs you up.

Adam: The information that you use helps your paper and does not overwhelm your voice.

Did the proposal anticipate and respond to all valid arguments (opposing viewpoints)? What additional counterarguments and/or concessions would be helpful?
Kayla: I think you should mention your solution earlier in the paper as well as at the end, I got a little confused on what solution you were choosing was the best.

Adam: You should talk more about you're solution earlier in you're paper.

Is the organization of the writing easy to follow?
Kayla: Yes it is well organized, but towards the end it seems to jump around, if you add a little more detail about each possible solution along with what solution you think is best and prove why, that would easily add more length.

Adam: Youre writing is easy to follow and easily understood.

What questions are raised in your mind after reading this proposal? Is anything missing?
Kayla: What exactly is the solution that you think is best why? and how can we implement it?

Adam: You seem to have a couple different solutions that could be worked on. Also you could site Michael Hanson in your bibliography.

What is the writing's greatest weakness?
Kayla: Not being strong in what the best solution is and why

Adam: Could expand more in explaining a few things and also look over her solution more.

What is the essay's greatest strength?
Kayla: The paper is very clear, and the information backs up the writer very well. The paper together is very good, add more detail and a more persuasive solution and you should easily get the length up!

Adam: The paper is easy to read and easy to follow.

Does it help you re-vision your proposal? No, I did not change my ideas based off these comments, but I did add a few things. Their comments made my solution paper stinger.

If so, how? If not, why not? Answered above.

Did you incorporate any of these comments into your revision of your draft? Yes, I used a few of them actually. Both Kayla and Adam said that they were confused on what my solution was so I made a lot of revisions based off that. Also, Adam made a comment that I should add Michael Hanson to my bibliography. That was helpful because I would not have remembered.

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