Solution Proposal Peer Review Kramer

Writers: Do you have any questions for your reviewers? If so, post them here:

  • How is the flow? Did you notice any awkward/clunky sentences?

- The main thing is that it is citation after citation, and not a whole lot of your own writing in between. - Alyssa
The flow was good. TJ


First: Please answer the writer's questions.^^

Then: Consider outside sources. Do they help support the writer's claims? Do the sources of support take over any portions of the writing and overwhelm the writer's voice?

- All of your outside sources support your claims. They get your point across, just take up a lot of the assignment though. - Alyssa
All of your sources supported your claims. TJ

Did the proposal anticipate and respond to all valid arguments (opposing viewpoints)? What additional counterarguments and/or concessions would be helpful?

- There needs to be an opposing viewpoint, like maybe why puppy mills (that do take care of their dogs) are beneficial. - Alyssa
I didn't see any opposing viewpoints. TJ

Is the organization of the writing easy to follow?

- Yes. - Alyssa
Yes TJ

What questions are raised in your mind after reading this proposal? Is anything missing?

- How often do these puppy mills get busted and shut down? - Alyssa
None TJ

What were the most memorable pieces of text?

- The types of things that happen to these puppies.. diseases, cages, injuries.. it's so sad. - Alyssa
I liked your introduction and how you organized your paper. TJ

What is the writing's greatest weakness?

- Not much of your own writing. - Alyssa
The opposing viewpoints TJ

What is the essay's greatest strength?

- Has a lot of sources to back up the claim. - Alyssa
You did a good job with all the sources to support your topic. TJ

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