Solution Proposal Peer Review Michael Hanson

Do you as the writer have any questions for your reviewers? If so, post them here:

  • Any grammatical errors that you're finding or any redundancy? None that I discovered. -EB

Reviewers:
Consider outside sources. Do they help support the writer's claims? Do the sources of support take over any portions of the writing and overwhelm the writer's voice?

  • Did the proposal anticipate and respond to all valid arguments (opposing viewpoints)? Yes, he did a good job of addressing the main arguments that he brought up. With the two he brought up he had lots of cited sources which makes the material more credible in my mind. (JM)

I think you did a nice job of using outside sources to support your claims. Both your voice and the voice of the sources cited were well heard. I also thought that the solution proposed accurately anticipated and responded to the opposing viewpoints discussed. - EB

  • What additional counterarguments and/or concessions would be helpful? As an extra argument i know you are just talking about labeling for the most part but you could always throw in a piece about how the chemicals used to spray this organisms is harming our land and wild animals and plants. (JM)

I think that some additional information regarding chemicals used would be a good thing to add as well. -EB

  • Is the organization of the writing easy to follow? It was nice and easy to follow because he used short paragraphs that were concise and to the point. (JM)

Yes. I felt that your essay was nicely organized and easy to follow. -EB

  • What questions are raised in your mind after reading this proposal? Is anything missing? What states are leading in the fight against the labeling of GMO's and why are they trying so hard to refuse it? (JM)

Maybe add some more facts about the negative effects of GMO's. -EB

  • What were the most memorable pieces of text? I think when he said that 90% of the commodity crops have been genetically treated so the labeling wouldn't be redundant. (JM)

For me, a memorable piece of this text was the statement of the following: "…over 60 countries already have restrictions or bans on GMOs because of safety and ethical concerns (“GMO Facts: Frequently Asked Questions”). This same article goes on to say that the United States hasn’t taken many steps towards banning or limiting the usage of GMOs because of safety studies done by companies that would benefit by not requiring GMO labeling." - EB
What is the writing's greatest weakness? I think that one of the minor weaknesses is that he only talks about the large corporations, because i have found that the little guy also plays a part in the debate if they know it or not. (JM)
I feel that some portrayal of the "little guy" and his part of the show would benefit your paper as well. -EB

  • What is the essay's greatest strength? The greatest strength of the whole paper is how he can mess the whole paper back to certain parts that he already talked on, this also comes into play with how many cites he has which I find it easier to believe the information. (JM)

I think that this essay's greatest strength is the accurate and insightful text included in your solution proposal. You had some great information behind your proposal and a lot of nicely cited sources throughout. -EB

Do you as the writer have any questions for your reviewers? If so, post them here:

  • Any grammatical errors that you're finding or any redundancy

-A cuple of spelling errors but not that noticeable. Just look over it at the end a look for words other wise looks good.(RN)
Consider outside sources. Do they help support the writer's claims? Do the sources of support take over any portions of the writing and overwhelm the writer's voice?
- You do support your claim and maybe you can look up some statistics to add in.(RN)
Did the proposal anticipate and respond to all valid arguments (opposing viewpoints)? What additional counterarguments and/or concessions would be helpful?
- You can maybe argue how before GMO's people were complaining about food poisioning and how fast foods need to have safer meats. If you look now people are not talking about how fast food meats may be something to watch but now they are complaining how safe the food is.(RN)
Is the organization of the writing easy to follow?
-The organization looks like its going in the right direction but maybe add some more counter arguments but also writing more on your proposal.(RN)
What questions are raised in your mind after reading this proposal? Is anything missing?
- Are GMO's safe? Talk about GMO's and what they are and what they do. Should we be concerned?(RN)
What were the most memorable pieces of text?
- The nut example when you describe GMO labeling(RN)
What is the writing's greatest weakness?
- The conclusion could be longer and I know you are not done so when you get to the end talk about why overall your solution if better.(RN)
What is the essay's greatest strength?
- You support your information.(RN)

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