Solution Proposal Peer Review Tyler

Writers: Do you have any questions for your reviewers? If so, post them here:

Does everything flow okay and make sense?
- It flowed nicely. This is a super concerning topic.. wow. - Alyssa
Dylan - The flow was really well.


First: Please answer the writer's questions.^^

Then: Consider outside sources. Do they help support the writer's claims? Do the sources of support take over any portions of the writing and overwhelm the writer's voice?

- The outside sources connected well with everything you were talking about. - Alyssa
Dylan - The sources for support worked really well.

Did the proposal anticipate and respond to all valid arguments (opposing viewpoints)? What additional counterarguments and/or concessions would be helpful?

- Go more in depth about why people think 'they deserve it' (if you can.. I know that may be tough) - Alyssa
Dylan - I think it is fairly hard to have any opposing views especially on this topic.

Is the organization of the writing easy to follow?

- Yes. - Alyssa
Dylan - It was very easy to follow.

What questions are raised in your mind after reading this proposal? Is anything missing?

- I want to know what the percent of people moved away from the area after this started, as well as the percentage increase of crime rate in this area. - Alyssa
Dylan - Like Alyssa said, statistics can improve your argument a lot.

What were the most memorable pieces of text?

- The part the stuck out in my mind is the age of these victim, and the fact that victims are getting younger because of the diseases that comes with sex trafficking. - Alyssa
Dylan - The fact that I haven't heard of this at all until I read your article, so for me it would have to be how close it is to Minnesota.

What is the writing's greatest weakness?

- Talk more about the ways to fix this problem. Also, some more statistics would be helpful. - Alyssa
Dylan - Not having more solutions to this problem.

What is the essay's greatest strength?

- There are lots of good examples of why this is so dangerous and scary. - Alyssa
Dylan - The support.

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